Lightning struck the night sky, and a voice thundered
“Your sins have crossed all boundaries. Be prepared to face the consequences…..”
Another small voice from below
“Why did you set boundaries and permit sin, God? There should have been no space.”
“It is the Will of the Lord. Do not challenge the Father, child.”
“My Dad is a poet, and he wrote the lines
One can make a hole in the sky
Use all your power to throw a stone”
“Your end is near …..”
A crowd had gathered to watch the street play, with flashlights beaming towards the sky.
In response to Rochelle Wisoff’s Challenge at
Credits:
The two poem lines are translated from Dushyant Kumar’s Hindi poem
“Kaise aakash mein soorakh nahin ho sakta
Ek patthar to tabiyat se ucchalo yaaro”
Nice one , u created an awesome atmosphere with this !!
Do read mine poems too , i hope you will love them !!
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Now *that* would be an interesting street performance.
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a powerful street play edging the viewers towards spiritual questions. and I was one of the viewers absorbing the aura . hope of get the answers one day.
http://ideasolsi65.blogspot.in/2017/06/the-siren.html
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I felt like I was there.
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This is the best compliment received on the piece. Thank you so much!
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Wonderful take on the prompt. Thank you for those lines by Dushyant Kumar. I had not read them before and so decided to google and found another gem. ये जो शहतीर है पलकों पे उठा लो यारो
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These lines are part of the same poem.
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Interesting take, makes you think, even if it is only a street ply at the end
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Thank you!
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Well done! I thought I was reading one thing and your switched it up. But the questions are still very relevant.
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Thanks a lot, Sascha! It had to be a street play, because I feel there is a nobody up there listening to anything.
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I definitely agree with you on that last bit.
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This was a powerful little piece filled with the questions each of us ask. I also had a spiritual twist to mine this week and here it is if you’re interested: https://michaelsfishbowl.com/2017/06/16/i-sit/
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That was clever leaving it to the end to tell us it was a street play. I thought I was reading a moral lecture from a religious zealot for a moment! But I should have known better, as you captured the absolute flavour of a street play with all the exaggerated acting that goes with such performances. Well done.
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Thank you!
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Wonderfully atmospheric and a totally unique take on the prompt pic.
My story is called ‘Someone’
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That was a most interesting take, Reena!
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Thank you, Dale!
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I’mnot sure if it’s street theatre or the Day of Judgement, but the atmosphere is good.
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Thank you!
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I liked this in parts and how you infused that fantastic quote. However, I also found it quite confusing. That can happen with this short word length.
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Agree.
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Nothing is better than an ending you do not see coming!😃
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Thanks!
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An innovative take.
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Love this. Wonderful surprise twist at the end 🙂
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Interesting story, Reena. I can just imagine the scene, though it reminds me more of the Bible story and verse ‘…who shall throw the first stone’. For, we all are guilty of sin and who among us is any less to blame. In short, no one is worthy to throw the first stone at another.
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Yes. Lyrics have been composed on this.
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Ominous!
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Kind of left me guessing, but it is very well done. Nice story, Reena.
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Lovely story , Reena. Loved Dushyant kumar’s lines and your translations.
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Thank you!
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Lovely atmosphere, Reena. Love the poetic lines.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thanks, Rochelle!
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At first, I thought of conversation was a mythical story. Then your last line put all in prospective. Did not expect a street play. Well DONE !!
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Thanks!
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Great atmospherics in this story, Reena.
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The picture is intriguing. It brought up several thoughts from folklore.
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I don’t entirely understand this, but I loved the atmosphere
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The dialogue that you read is part of a street play, not related to actual lightning or thunder.
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